a new day leads

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paura nella	a new day leads	Lead	[-]
Posts: 1639 (10/21/06 09:20:53) Artistic Hack/Mod Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts Report Post	Tags : None _to dawn, dark horizons become kaleidescopes leading down__infinite possibilities--springing forth dreams belonging to one's self unchained from degradation --__-- [heavy sigh]
bluezoe	Re: a new day leads	#1	[-]
Posts: 3319 (10/21/06 12:09:59) Killing poetry since 1994/Chief Mod Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts Report Post	This is different. i like it, what it's saying. The poem feels like a sigh ("heavy sigh"). i'm not sure how i feel about the dashes. Some of them i like (the underscores, actually) and some seem pretty random (the double dashes, like in the last line). i'm curious. Kaleidescope, maybe?
paura nella	Re: a new day leads	#2	[-]
Posts: 1639 (10/21/06 12:12:50) Artistic Hack/Mod Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts Report Post	Thanks foir catching the nit, zoe! Yeah, its suppose to convey the feeli g of being lost in deep thought...

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